Writing test

I expected to learn how to write, and I wanted to be corrected by teacher.
If I do not have any corrections, I cannot aware of where I have mistake. Writing is not only write, but also reading and grammar. I think we should have ability not only speaking. Many people could speak with foreigner, but few people could write sentence impeccably. However, I knew what the class does, so I did not so expect.

I think I just post my blogs this semester. I do not know what kind of mistake I have. I had written many blogs, but blog is different from writing. Blog is informally writing. However, I think outline is good. Writing outline makes it easy writing. Moreover, I could get ability of typing. Now, we are wanted to have capacity of computer. Then, we learned using computer trough this class. Many people post blog in the world. However, I do not like the Mac computer, so I do not want to write something in this class. I often write by my computer.

I want to get guidance to write something, and I should have correction for my writing. I think ability of writing improve to write many times. The class should not force how many words we have to write in blog. I think it is better how many times we should post or we should post every day. So we can get into the habit of writing blog. Of course, writing blog is one of good writing class, but we should write official writing as much as blog. I think the classes are not separate, and it has only one class that is English class. Then, we can get almighty ability of English.


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Portfolios

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Student ID: vwxyz
Please replace "vwxyz" (above) with
the last five digits of your student number
(without quotation marks).

Portfolio for Writing IV,
Section 1a OR 1c

[Please delete the unsuitable class section and "OR" (above), along with this line of remarks.]

(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. Overview

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

[Please embed your proto-portfolios here; then remove this line of remarks, including the square brackets.]

1.0. Essays

(See: Note 3, below.)

Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates yy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
Website review 08.09.29 (375+ words)	http://www.japan-guide.com/e/e2158.html	08.09.28 08.10.11	5 5	352 393	6 0	1 1	0 4	0 0
Favorite place(-s) 08.10.20 (450+ words)	WR　My favorite place	08.10.19	3	454	1	0	0	0
Mrs. Doubtfire 08.11.04 (500+ words)	MR: Mrs Doubt	08.11.04	4	452	12	0	1	0
Community life 08.11.17 (default length*)	special place of my community	08.11.17	4	256	0	0	3	0
Kumamoto's best-kept secrets 08.12.01 (5+ ¶¶)	Secret of Kumamoto	0812.02	5	283	0	0	2	0
Learning with computers 2008.12.15 (6+ ¶¶)	Learning with computer	08.12.10	5	310	0	0	0	0
Totals	---	---

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post
*: "long enough to cover the ... [communities] you choose," Writing Studio Blog, Preparation for Next Essays, 2008.10.29)

1.2. Best Essay

Selection and Assessment: Which of those six assigned essays do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• I feel the best essay is "My favorite place". That because I like the places the best, and I could told how I like there.
  

2.0. Comments

Showcase	Titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	MR: Mrs Doubt	08.11.15	63	She gave me a advice. So I can make better post!
2.4. Most comments on:	Titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	"Kagoshima no.2"	2008.09.08	30	I have good memory with thecomment.
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---		---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---		---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes them good comments.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• ... I have sidebar. I can check the comments at there.
  

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• [Please remove these remarks, including the square brackets; then write out your reflections on both giving and receiving comments here.]




• ....
  

3.0. Book Reviews

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates (yy.mm.dd)	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	07.05.16	39	1
2-01	BR:01 The Lost Ship	08.08.11	176	0
2-02	BR:02 In the Frame	2008.09.02	112	0
2-03	BR:03 Alissa	2008.09.15	252	0
2-04	BR:04 The Hunt for Gold	2008.09.22	261	0
2-05	BR:05 The Evil Genie	2008.10.3	281	0
2-06	BR:06 London	2008.10.13	143	0
2-07	BR:07　Which one killed her	2008.10．20	201	0
2-08	BR:08 Animal Babies	2008.10.26	61	0
2-09	BR:09 Funny Fish	2008.11.02	68	0
2-10	BR:10 The Snowman	2008.11.05	53	0
2-11	BR:11 The Egg Hunt	2008.11.10	67	0
2-12	BR:12 The Carnival	2008.11.13	46	0
2-13	BR:13 How to Be Healthy	2008.11.21	53	0
2-14	BR:14 The Magic Key	2008.12.04	64	0
2-15	BR:15 Robin Hood	2008.12.09	137	0
2-16	BR:16 What was it Like?	2008.12.04	74	0
2-17	BR:17 Rotten Apples	2008.12.15	112	0
2-18	BR:18 TINKERS FARM	2008.12.19	81	0
2-19	BR:19 What comes in threes?	2008.12.21	40	0
---	---	Totals:	2282	0

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• BR:07 Which one killed her

I choice the book review because I like the writer. I read many times.

4.0. Blog Layout, Labeling, Linking, & Media

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?		○
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?		○
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	○
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?		○
4.2. Does your blog have labels displayed in sidebar?	○
5.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	○
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	○
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	○
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)		○
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	○
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")		○
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	○
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? five other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. activities (31) favorites (18) friends (11) 塁球essays (14) Japan (17)	---	---
4.3. Links & media	---	---
4.3.1. Does your blog include photos or other graphics?	○
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? 53 posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	○
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? 1 post including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? 　Only one posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: ...YouTube ...Wikipedia ... Mixi	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yy.mm.dd) for reference. ... (YouTube, 2008.09.24)	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. ...I feel making review is very good for me.




2. ...I think reading friend's blog and post my comennt is usuful.




3. ...The best things are comennt by my friends. It could help me making next blog.

5.0. Additional reflections on your blog and your writing on it

Please feel free to include reflections on both spring and fall semester work, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, and reflections).

• ...I have many posts this blog, but I feel it is nt so usuful.




• ...Movie review is good, but book review is not so fun. It is tired, and I cannot get knowledge.




• ... If I have to take this class, I want to understand the class more easily.
  

6.0. Advice and suggestions for yourself, your peers, and your successors

• ...I shoul write my reviews more carefuly.




• ...I realize how to make better review by friend's comennt.




• ... When I write a review or report, I shoul search for the information more.
  

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2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
   




3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derives from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   

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http://www.japan-guide.com/e/e2158.html

I will introduce to this homepage. This homepage is information of Kyoto. Kyoto is one of the famous tourist spot in Japan. Many people travel to there. Why I think I will introduce this homepage, I will go top Kyoto next spring vacation. Then, I search much information.Kyoto was Japan's capital and the emperor's residence from 794 until 1868. Kyoto has many temples. Japanese temple is so historical.





The most popular temple is Kinkakuji.
Ashikaga Yoshimitu built Kinkakuji at near Kyoto station.
When Kinkakuji built there, people called around there Rakuhoku.
Kinkakuji is decollated by gold. The temple has tea ceremony room.

Kiyomizudera is also famous temple.

The picture is Kiyomizu-no-Butai.
It was used Kyou(狂) and Nougaku(能楽).
It is built at Higashiyama Gjou.
‘Kiyomizu’ is the water what people called Otowanotaki. We can live more long if we drink the water.

Both Kinkakuji and Kiyomizudera is one of World Heritage. Many foreign people come there to sightseeing. Kyoto also famous of autumn color.

The picture is Ryuuanji. Ryuuanji is near Kinkakuji.

We can enjoy the best sightseeing when the season is autumn.

We walk around Kyoto’s old street, we can find Maiko. Maiko is special Japanese culture. They wear kimono and they know Japanese culture so much. Our Japanese people don’t know about Japanese culture. So we yearn for them. However, I never seen them. If you have about two hours, you can transform to Maiko. It cost more over 10,000 yen. The shop made you to makeup and hair set.Kyoto has good water, so there are many delicious foods. For example, there are Yuba, Tukemono, Namayatuhashi and so on. Japanese sweet is also famous.

I have been to Kyoto when I was junior high school student. At that time, I went to Kinkakuji and Kiyomizudera. However, I was not interested in those culture and buildings. So I think now, that I should have seen them deeper. I studied Japanese history by my teacher when I was high school student. After that I have interest and I am proud of Japanese history. Now, I want to go to there and have sight seen to famous spot. Recently, most young people want to visit over sea. However, I think visit around Japan and know Japanese culture is the most important thing for Japanese people.

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